News96: Suggested changes

Author: jnewbery

_posts/en/newsletters/2020-05-06-newsletter.md

@@ -25,7 +25,7 @@ notable code changes from popular Bitcoin infrastructure software.
 - **QR codes for large transactions:** QR codes can practically contain
   up to about 3 kilobytes of data, which is enough to accommodate
   typical user transactions but far too small to contain the largest
-  transactions users can normally send (about 400 kilobytes).  Riccardo
+  transactions users can normally send.  Riccardo
   Casatta and Christopher Allen each posted to the Bitcoin-Dev mailing
   list ([1][casatta qr], [2][allen qr]) a request for discussion
   hopefully leading to standardization of a method for visual
@@ -46,8 +46,8 @@ Bitcoin presentations and discussions. In this new <!-- TODO: remove "new" next
 highlight a selection of the transcripts from the previous month.*
 
 - **Simplicity---Next-Generation Smart Contracting** Adam Back presented at a
-  Blockstream webinar on Simplicity: a next-generation, low-level
-  alternative to Bitcoin Script focused on provable security and greater
+  Blockstream webinar on Simplicity, a next-generation, low-level
+  alternative to Bitcoin Script focused on provable security and
   expressiveness. Back discussed how Simplicity, if enabled in Bitcoin
   today, would allow developers to implement new functionality like
   [SIGHASH_NOINPUT][topic sighash_noinput] without necessarily needing a soft fork. He also
@@ -71,18 +71,18 @@ highlight a selection of the transcripts from the previous month.*
   Jager discussed the challenges of [multipart payments][topic multipath
   payments] including the splitting algorithm, what happens when the
   shards of the payment arrive at different times, and strategies for
-  when a multipart payment fails. Gugger ended by discussing Partially
+  handling multipart payment failures. Gugger ended by discussing Partially
   Signed Bitcoin Transaction ([PSBT][topic psbt]) channel funding and
   the channel abstraction work that made this possible.
   ([transcript][lnd10 xs], [video][lnd10 vid])
 
-- **Grokking Bitcoin** Kalle Rosenbaum both participated in a [Socratic
-  Seminar][] and gave a presentation at London Bitcoin Devs.  The
-  seminar focused on the role of Bitcoin technical
+- **Grokking Bitcoin** Kalle Rosenbaum participated in a Bitcoin developer meetup
+  and gave a presentation at London Bitcoin Devs.  The
+  meetup discussion focused on the role of Bitcoin technical
   education, [BIP32][] HD wallets, and soft fork upgrades.  For the
   presentation, Rosenbaum used the content in his book to discuss how
   the segwit upgrade of 2017 addressed transaction malleability and
-  quadratic hashing.  ([Socratic transcript][grok xs2], [presentation
+  quadratic hashing.  ([Meetup transcript][grok xs2], [presentation
   transcript][grok xs1], [presentation video][grok vid], [presentation
   slides][grok slides])
 
@@ -159,12 +159,12 @@ version 0.20.*
 
   To ensure new transactions reach the network even without frequent
   indiscriminate rebroadcast by the wallet, this PR also adds a type of
-  "unbroadcast" transaction within the mempool. An unbroadcasted transaction is
-  one that has been submitted locally via the wallet or RPC but which hasn't
-  been deemed successfully broadcast to the network. Such unbroadcasted
+  _unbroadcast_ transaction within the mempool. An unbroadcast transaction is
+  one that has been submitted locally via the wallet or RPC but which has not
+  yet been successfully relayed to peers on the network. Such unbroadcast
   transactions remain in the mempool and will be rebroadcast every 10-15 minutes
-  until the node receives a `getdata` P2P message for that transaction, which
-  acts as a heuristic for determining a successful initial broadcast.
+  until a peer has fetched the transaction by sending the node a `getdata` P2P
+  message for that transaction.
 
 - [BIPs #893][] makes several changes to the [BIP340][] specification of
   [schnorr][topic schnorr signatures] pubkeys and signatures, with
@@ -238,4 +238,3 @@ version 0.20.*
 [grok vid]: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6tHnYyaw0qw
 [grok slides]: http://rosenbaum.se/ldnbitcoindev/drawing.sozi.html
 [grok xs2]: https://diyhpl.us/wiki/transcripts/london-bitcoin-devs/2020-04-22-socratic-seminar/
-[socratic seminar]: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Socratic_method#Socratic_Circles