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rschlaikjer
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Dec 16, 2023
| @@ -12,8 +12,8 @@ There's a kitchen and a single main room, perfect for someone living alone. | |||
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| -- 部屋は先輩らしく小奇麗で、そんな些細な事が少しだけ、麻痺した神経をほぐしていた。 | |||
| // Reading 先輩 as specifically Ciel here | |||
| The room is very well kept, just as I'd expect of her. | |||
| That trifling detail helps to thaw my frozen nerves a little. | |||
| The room is very well kept, just as you would imagine from her, | |||
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"Imagine from her" doesn't sound right imo
| You'll end up catching pneumonia if you just sit there like that!" | ||
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| -- 他人への怒りで動転する人を、はじめて見た気がする。 | ||
| I've never seen someone this worked up over another person's behavior. | ||
| It's probably the first time I've seen someone let their anger at a stranger affect them so much. |
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Much more awkward phrasing, revert.
| and I feel my pulse start pounding through my body. | ||
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| -- 心臓とか脳とか、止まっていた<機|も><能|の>が転がりだすような、そんな熱さだった。 | ||
| // https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=CmXWkMlKFkI | ||
| It was even enough to kickstart my heart, mind, and other frozen faculties, that's how hot it was. | ||
| Hot enough that it feels like it's kickstarted my heart, mind, and other frozen faculties. |
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Might reorder qualifiers to feel more increasing
Hot enough to scald [...]
So hot it even feels like it's kickstarted [...]
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