Petri_ciel03_3_3b #1408
Petri_ciel03_3_3b #1408
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| But no matter how hard you think about it, you can never be sure whether it was really right or wrong. | ||
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| -- だからそんなふうに、一方的に自分を追い詰めてハッキリさせるしかないんですよね」 | ||
| That's why you feel like you have to force yourself into a corner and make a hard decision one way or another, isn't it?" | ||
| Which is why push yourself so hard to make it clear whether or not it was, like you are now, right?" |
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why you would push yourself or why you'd push yourself
But this sentence is long-winded and left me confused. To help, maybe get rid of the like you are now bit. So:
Which is why you'd push yourself so hard to make it clear whether or not it was, right?"
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I don't think it alleviates the problem, though I'm unsure if there is that much of a problem.
Which is why you push yourself so hard to make it clear that it was wrong, right?
Trying to make the subject more clear is probably a better solution, in that case.
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You're pushing yourself this hard to try and find an answer to that question, aren't you?
| You always think that you've done something wrong. | ||
| Today is a prime example of that. | ||
| You always think that %{i}you've%{/i} done something wrong. | ||
| And today is the ultimate expression of that. |
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Prefer a prime example here
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Want "the", not "a", which doesn't work as well with "prime example".
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Today is the perfect example [of that].
'ultimate expression' does sound kinda off.
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| -- 安物ですけど濡れた服よりずっといいです。お風呂もそろそろ沸きますから、お湯につかってゆっくりすれば、少しは気持ちも紛れますよ」 | ||
| // "nice hot soak" MAYBE Britishism? Verdict pending. |
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Dieu et mon droit I SHALL include the Britishisms
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Also even if it is this feels innocuous
| I'm sorry, that was careless of me! | ||
| I-If they're broken, I'll pay for it!" | ||
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| -- あわてて眼鏡を拾おうとする、善良な人の<死顔|すがた>があった。 | ||
| The well-intentioned girl who rushed to pick up my glasses took on the face of a corpse. | ||
| The well-intentioned girl who rushes to pick up my glasses takes on the face of death. |
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I feel like there's a distinction here?
[...] now wears the face of a corpse
| That's just the kind of being I am. | ||
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| -- こういう、■■な生き物だった。 | ||
| A ■■■■■■■ creature. | ||
| A ■■■■■■■ being. |
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Prefer creature here. Slightly more deviant.
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| -- だから俺が、理由もなく何かを台無しにしてしまうのはごく自然な在り方なのだと、心の何処かで――― | ||
| That's why, somewhere in my heart, | ||
| So somewhere in my heart, |
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This 'that's why' vendetta remains somewhat silly.
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| -- 在り続けなくてはいけないと、底の底で信じている。 | ||
| I believe, deep down, that it must continue to exist. | ||
| I believe, deep down, that it must keep on being. |
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Prefer original, 'keep on being' somewhat strange.
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| -- 体が冷えきっているコト、分かってくれました？」 | |||
| Do you appreciate just how cold your body is now?" | |||
| Do you grasp just how cold your body is now?" | |||
| You always think that you've done something wrong. | ||
| Today is a prime example of that. | ||
| You always think that %{i}you've%{/i} done something wrong. | ||
| And today is the ultimate expression of that. |
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Today is the perfect example [of that].
'ultimate expression' does sound kinda off.
| But no matter how hard you think about it, you can never be sure whether it was really right or wrong. | ||
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| -- だからそんなふうに、一方的に自分を追い詰めてハッキリさせるしかないんですよね」 | ||
| That's why you feel like you have to force yourself into a corner and make a hard decision one way or another, isn't it?" | ||
| Which is why push yourself so hard to make it clear whether or not it was, like you are now, right?" |
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You're pushing yourself this hard to try and find an answer to that question, aren't you?
| Even if you %{i}had%{/i} become a bad person, I'd still reach out to you. | ||
| Well, not that I think you ever actually would." | ||
| Even if you %{i}were%{/i} a bad person, I'd still reach out to you. | ||
| Well, I sincerely doubt that is the case." |
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Doesn't connect very well.
Even if you %{i}were%{/i} a bad person, I'd still reach out to you.
Not that I think that hypothetical is at all likely, mind you."
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| -- 俺は、その言葉に救われた。 | |||
| I'm saved by her words. | |||
| Her words prove my salvation. | |||
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Feels like it's trying too hard and makes it kinda unclear in EN without the jp to read.
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