fix: update wording

beta/index.md

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 Welcome to the Fasten beta! This beta is provided with a couple of caveats:
 
 - Fasten is still partially closed-source (please see the Reddit discussion for more info)
-- The Beta version is only available as a Docker image (eventually we'll support other modes of distribution)
+- The beta version is only available as a Docker image (eventually we'll support other modes of distribution)
 - Fasten is still a work-in-progress (many buttons in the UI do not do anything)
 
-If you haven't already, please fill out this [Google Form](https://forms.gle/SNsYX9BNMXB6TuTw6)
+If you would like to stay up-to-date with the latest updates, please fill out this [Google Form](https://forms.gle/SNsYX9BNMXB6TuTw6)
 
 ---
 
 ## Getting Started
 
-Below are instructions to get started with self hosting the Fasten Beta.
+Below are instructions to get started with self hosting the Fasten beta.
 
 Fasten comes in two flavors depending on whether you want to use it with your real medical records, or just test it out with fake data.
 

beta/main.md

@@ -8,7 +8,7 @@ nav_order: 1
 
 # Setting up Fasten to Use With Real Medical Data
 
-This version allows you to connect to 650+ different Healthcare providers, using your existing accounts. It will allow you to connect and retrive your full electronic medical record and store it within Fasten.
+This version lets you connect to 27,000+ institutions using your existing accounts. It will enable you to connect and retrieve your full electronic medical record and store it within Fasten.
 
 Run the following commands to download and start the Fasten docker container.
 
@@ -17,15 +17,15 @@ docker pull ghcr.io/fastenhealth/fasten-onprem:main
 docker run --rm -p 9090:8080 ghcr.io/fastenhealth/fasten-onprem:main
 ```
 
-Next, open a browser to [http://localhost:9090](http://localhost:9090)
+To see if Fasten is running, open [http://localhost:9090](http://localhost:9090) in your browser.
 
-At this point you'll be redirected to the login page.
+Congrats, you've successfully started Fasten!
 
 ## Logging In
 
-Once you've been redirected to the login page, you'll need to create an account at [http://localhost:9090/web/auth/signup](http://localhost:9090/web/auth/signup).
+Once Fasten has started, you'll next need to create an account by clicking the [Create an Account button](http://localhost:9090/web/auth/signup) on the login screen. You'll be prompted to enter your name, a username, and a password.
 
-It can be as simple as
+It can be as simple as:
 
 - **Username:** `testuser`
 - **Password:** `testtest`
@@ -34,14 +34,14 @@ Congrats! You're now logged in. You'll be redirected to the dashboard, which wil
 
 ## Dashboard
 
-Once you login, you'll be taken to the dashboard.
-From here you can explore the data retrieved from the various healthcare providers.
-This page will intially be empty, see the next section - `Connecting a new Source` - for more info.
+Once you log in, you'll be taken to the dashboard.
+From here, you can explore the data retrieved from the various healthcare providers.
+This page will initially be empty; see the next section - `Connecting a new Source` - for more info.
 
 ## Connecting a new Source
 
 Before you can use Fasten, you'll need to connect a healthcare provider.
 
-If you're using the `main` flavor of Fasten, find a Source where you have an account, and login with your credentials.
+Click the `Add Source` button, scroll down to the `HEALTHCARE COMPANIES` section, and search for a patient portal to connect. Once you've selected a portal, follow the prompts and log in with your patient portal credentials. Once you've logged in, you'll be redirected back to the dashboard. Please note that syncing your medical records can take a while, so please be patient.
 
 Congrats, you're all set! Fasten will now start syncing your medical records.

index.md

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 Fasten is an open-source and self-hosted electronic medical record aggregator for individuals and families. Securely connect your healthcare providers together, creating a personal health record that never leaves your hands.
 
-[Get started now](/BETA.html){: .btn .btn-primary .fs-5 .mb-4 .mb-md-0 .mr-2 }
+[Get started now](/beta/){: .btn .btn-primary .fs-5 .mb-4 .mb-md-0 .mr-2 }
 [View on GitHub](https://github.com/fastenhealth/fasten-onprem/){: .btn .fs-5 .mb-4 .mb-md-0 }
 
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@@ -35,17 +35,15 @@ Recently I had a semi-serious medical issue, and I realized that my medical hist
 is a lot more complicated than I realized and distributed across the many healthcare providers I've used over the years.
 I wanted a single (private) location to store our medical records, and I just couldn't find any software that worked as I'd like:
 
-- self-hosted/offline - this is my medical history, I'm not willing to give it to some random multi-national corporation to data-mine and sell
-- It should aggregate my data from multiple healthcare providers (insurance companies, hospital networks, clinics, labs) across multiple industries (vision, dental, medical) -- all in one dashboard
-- automatic - it should pull my EMR (electronic medical record) directly from my insurance provider/clinic/hospital network - I dont want to scan/OCR physical documents (unless I have to)
-- open source - the code should be available for contributions & auditing
+- **Self-hosted** - this is my medical history, I'm not willing to give it to some random multi-national corporation to data-mine and sell
+- **All inclusive** - It should aggregate my data from multiple healthcare providers (insurance companies, hospital networks, clinics, labs) across multiple industries (vision, dental, medical) -- all in one dashboard
+- **Automatic** - It should pull my EMR (electronic medical record) directly from my insurance provider/clinic/hospital network - I dont want to scan/OCR physical documents (unless I have to)
+- **Open Source** - The code should be available for contributions & auditing
 
-So, I built it
+So, I built it.
 
 **Fasten is an open-source, self-hosted, personal/family electronic medical record aggregator, designed to integrate with 100,000's of insurances/hospitals/clinics**
 
-Here's a couple of screenshots that'll give you an idea of what it looks like:
-
 <p align="center">
   <a href="https://imgur.com/a/vfgojBD">
   <img alt="fasten_view" src="https://i.imgur.com/UaZyEbN.png">
@@ -56,7 +54,7 @@ Here's a couple of screenshots that'll give you an idea of what it looks like:
 
 # Features
 
-It's pretty basic right now, but it's designed with a easily extensible core around a solid foundation:
+Fasten is designed with a solid foundation that is easily extensible:
 
 - Self-hosted
 - Designed for families, not Clinics (unlike OpenEMR and other popular EMR systems)